The attack was the second of the day, after a Palestinian man attempted
to stab police
officers before being shot dead. Palestinian
media identified him as Ahmed Fathi Abu
Sha’aban, 26, of Ras al-Amoud, East Jerusalem. He was reportedly recently released from Israeli
prison after serving three years on terror charges.
Police said the
attacker stabbed a woman, 70, on Jaffa Street and then attempted to board
a city bus outside the station, which is in a busy commercial area.
The victim suffered
moderate injuries to her upper body and received medical treatment on site,
paramedics said. She was taken to Shaare Zedek Medical Center
for treatment.
“There was a woman in her 60s
sitting next to the driver, bleeding but fully conscious,
with stab wounds
to her upper body. We gave her medical treatment and sent her to the hospital. She is in moderate
to serious condition,”
Dr. Yoni Elstein, who was on the bus where the attack occurred, told the Times of Israel.
A few other people
were treated for shock, Magen David Adom’s CEO told Channel 2.
Sarah Blum, a
French-Israeli, told the Times of Israel that
she was walking down Jaffa Street after exiting the bus station when “the guy
came at me when I was on the phone with my mom.”
She said she saw
him, just yards away, “with his hand pulling a knife from his side,” leaped off the sidewalk
and yelled for help. He
turned and fled, chased down the street by passersby.
Israeli police were searching for a possible second suspect in the attack, but later ruled out the possibility of a second attacker.
The attack was the
latest in a spate of terror attacks that
have rocked Jerusalem over the past weeks amid spiraling tensions.
**Updated: [October 19]
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ReplyDeleteReally good job. Very intense. I like how you put the font that is intended to be visible in red. I think the way you edited this article is incredible to bring out another story within a story itself. It's also really interesting how you put "The Times of Israel" as not only a name of the newspaper but as something happening now and created a different idea in the readers mind than just a paper.
ReplyDeleteI love the repetition of "The Times of Israel," and how you co-opt the phrase for your poem to refer to the era of Israeli politics. I think this poem could be stronger by using fewer words like "the" and using more of the articles vivid verbs like "spiraling." If the poem personifies Israel as a woman get rid of abstract language that refers to a singular event like attack/woman.
ReplyDeleteHi Leah!
ReplyDeleteI really like many aspects of this poem, including the visual RED letters. I also like that you tried to keep the poem about the general attacks of the past few weeks, and not any specific one. Still, this idea can be strengthened by taking out some articles (the, a...), as we discussed in class. Great overall job though!
Hi Leah!
ReplyDeleteI really like many aspects of this poem, including the visual RED letters. I also like that you tried to keep the poem about the general attacks of the past few weeks, and not any specific one. Still, this idea can be strengthened by taking out some articles (the, a...), as we discussed in class. Great overall job though!
I thought that this was a very powerful poem that took one of the specific events happening in Israel right now and made it about the overall situation over the past several weeks. I liked how all of the words are in red because they make the situation feel very serious and scary (which it is). I think that it could have been more impactful if more of the words were kept in that were crossed out. Overall I think that this was a creative way to inform readers of critical current events happening in Israel.
ReplyDeleteThis poem is very empowering. Especially with how it is shown (font, color, etc.) I really liked the first line, "The attack identified as Jerusalem." As said above, the poem would have been more impactful if more detail was kept in.
ReplyDeleteOtherwise - good job!
This poem is very empowering. Especially with how it is shown (font, color, etc.) I really liked the first line, "The attack identified as Jerusalem." As said above, the poem would have been more impactful if more detail was kept in.
ReplyDeleteOtherwise - good job!
This poem has a very powerful image and i'm really glad you chose Israel as your topic. I felt the words come out at me, and with it the emotional fear. I especially loved how you used "The Times of Israel," portraying an era of fear and distraught "she" (Israel) is going through. Your edits from what we saw in class, I think, fix the issue of dealing with a specific attack vs the multiple attacks. Good job!
ReplyDeletehey! The layout of the poem with the contrast of the strikethroughs and the bright red words of the poem is extremely emphatic and immediately demands the attention of your audience. It is definitely not easy to write about such horrifying and tragic news, so I commend you for your bravery. My favorite part was when you repeated the line "Time of Israel." This created a dramatic tense moment! You may consider using less concrete nouns and terms, and add more powerful verbs that I can see are crossed out.
ReplyDeleteGreat job!
hey! The layout of the poem with the contrast of the strikethroughs and the bright red words of the poem is extremely emphatic and immediately demands the attention of your audience. It is definitely not easy to write about such horrifying and tragic news, so I commend you for your bravery. My favorite part was when you repeated the line "Time of Israel." This created a dramatic tense moment! You may consider using less concrete nouns and terms, and add more powerful verbs that I can see are crossed out.
ReplyDeleteGreat job!